Last week, Peter Beverly continued our London chain story. Here is the third chapter, written by Time Out reader Mark T Kelly. Thanks to everyone who contributed.
Chapter Three by Mark T Kelly
The school toilets were full on Friday afternoon. Betsy and her schoolmates shared gossip and jostled for mirror space as they picked at split ends left brittle from cheap dye. Betsy slid into her new Zara dress and admired her slender body. ‘You look wicked,’ giggled Caroline. ‘Your Mr Professor’s not gonna know you.’
Betsy laughed. ‘Jesus, Caroline. I look like Mo but five years older!’
Betsy had met her handsome ‘professor’ two months previously in the King’s College Starbucks, a week after her fifteenth birthday. She’d been with her father. They had argued, loudly, and he had stormed out – back to his office to brood. Franz’s voice had interrupted her thoughts. ‘Hello, may I join you? I saw you in heated debate with the famous Otto Fleischer. Are you a philosopher?’
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‘Of sorts,’ she said.
Franz introduced himself as the visiting Radcliffe Lecturer at University College, Oxford, a post her father had once held. Betsy smiled at the coincidence.
Over the following months Betsy and Franz met for coffee on Upper Street, whenever he was in town. They would discuss everything and Franz called her his ‘Rose Philosopher’. ‘Ah,’ he would say, ‘so Otto’s daughter doesn’t agree that Heidegger’s “Being and Time” is the great philosophical work of the twentieth century?’
‘I’m an ignorant undergraduate,’ she’d lie. ‘To me it’s bombastic nonsense.’ And they would both laugh.
The similarities between Franz and her father were startling. Betsy was her father’s star pupil; she was intelligent, precise and logical, and she loved to poke fun at his philosophies. To him, she was everything Mo was not; but he struggled with her teenage ambitions. Franz, however, treated her as an adult and as an equal.
He was intelligent and charming, and eventually he asked her to dinner.
Three days had passed since Betsy’s ‘date’ with Franz. She could recall only vague hints of her 72 hours of darkness; the pungent smell of disinfectant; the deep, droning voices and nausea.
She shifted nervously in the back seat of the car like a restless child. Franz was talking as he drove. ‘And let me tell you, my Rose Philosopher, your Father is not the only one to know of Heidegger’s war-time secret. But he is the only one to know of its location. You are an intelligent little treasure. We simply intend to swap one treasure for another…’
His phone rang. Betsy could make out a heavy Russian accent. ‘Where the hell are you?’ asked the voice. ‘We cannot be late for the flight.’
It was dark and they’d hit the rush-hour traffic, but Franz didn’t offer an explanation. ‘I’ll be there soon,’ he said.
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10 comments
Judging from the responses, it seems all are writers wanting to take a stab at writing the next installment. Eventhough we are now on the 13th installment, most of these responses happen to be for the first, a bit misleading in a way until you read carefully.
I'm confused - the title is "A London Story" but what's being published bears little or no relation to it. Babygirl appears to have been spirited AWAY from London; the frequent flashbacks to Germany are quite simply bizarre; thank god Howard Dorman has paid attention to the title!! This story is utterly depressing.
I think the best way to trace Franz would be to place a sheet of translucent paper over an old photograph of him and then carefully sketch his outline with a soft pencil, adding as much detail and colour for realism as possible.
It's no doubt that the piece is well written and would be a good read, but it's a genre. Toby did what he does -write well and about something he has a story in his head about. But if the TimeOut people wanted a large participation then it would have been better to start us off at a path with many possible paths.
Hmmm, nice idea, shame the first chapter is less than inspirational.
Really fun idea, but agreed the beginning doesnt leave a lot to work with at all. I guess the next chapter will really set the tone in stone. Also a deadline wld be nice for submissions (!)
Sorry to change the subject chaps,but I've just noticed that the capricious gods of the Time Out books section have once again ignored our prayers for the listing of our poetry club which they insist is finished. NO !
Y Tuesday poetry club, Tuesday 6th March 2007, 8pm, 3 Kings pub, Clerkenwell close EC1
London's cosy, candle lit club with a cat, 1 year old and going strong. Still a whopping FREE to get in.
Great idea, but a deadline when entries have to be in by each week would be useful. I couldn't see on in the mag or on the site.
Great Idea!! This would have been great fun, just wonder why you had to start us off so somberly with negativity looming in the future. It leaves us very little versatility. Hope you give us the chance again and start us off with a little lighter feeling and a chance for a diverse plot. I'll be looking forward to it.
Nice start Toby, rich with promise and all sorts of potential. It's inspired me to attempt an entry, but I'm a bit rubbish at fiction. Looking forward to the next episode folks.