Last week, Owain Paciuszko continued
our London chain story. Here is the fifth chapter, written by Time Out
reader Stephen Emms. Thanks to everyone who contributed.
Chapter Five by Stephen Emms
She spoke quickly: the easy life in Berlin, the presumed whereabouts of Betsy.
‘At least you know she’s alive, right?’ said Tobias. ‘He wouldn’t do anything, would he? He’s corrupt, but not dangerous?’
‘I don’t know,’ Mo shook her head. ‘Everything was about money. He didn’t care about anybody.’ She laughed: ‘It sounds like I’m making this up doesn’t it? But I’m determined to find him – and get my money back, too.’
She felt foolish making grand proclamations to a stranger, especially as that was how she had impressed Franz in the first place. That bloody trust fund.
‘I’d better get back to work,’ Tobias grinned. ‘Can I see you later?’
‘Maybe,’ she smiled back. ‘Yeah, why not?’
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He disappeared into the kitchen. Mo tried to concentrate on the thousands of Franz Schmidts listed on the screen.
‘Did you forget your keys?’ she had snapped that night.
‘I’m taking you out.’ Franz was standing at the door, beaming. ‘Come on, get dressed. I'll be outside.’
She had thrown on a clean top, put her hair up and run down the six flights of stairs. She remembered feeling something, but couldn’t pinpoint the emotion. Franz was sitting in a black limo.
‘Look at you!’ she said. ‘Tell me where we’re going.’
‘No.’
‘You know I hate surprises.’
‘You’ll see.’ His look silenced her. The cab sped past the concrete expanse of Alexanderplatz towards Mitte. On the corner of Charlottenstrasse, the driver opened the door.
‘Lutter and Wegner!’ Mo had exclaimed.
‘It’s my way of saying thank you,’ he said. ‘Thank you for investing your money and thank you for inviting a poor stray in.’ He kissed her. ‘I love you. Come on, we’re late. Let’s eat!’
Inside, the restaurant was abuzz with chatter. They were led through a series of rooms decorated with fresh flowers to a table away from the sea of avuncular men and vulture-faced women.
‘I’m having weiner schnitzel,’ Mo had announced as they glanced at the menu.
‘Why not try the fish?’ Franz had said. Typical Franz. ‘Okay, okay, have the schnitzel if you must.’
A few moments later he had said: ‘Why are you doing this?’
‘Doing what? It’s what I fancy, that’s all.’
They had eaten two courses and drunk two bottles of Fleurie. She had barely spoken, but with Franz it was always like that.
‘Excuse me,’ he had said, flushed with wine. ‘I’m just going to the toilet.’ She smiled. After ten minutes he hadn’t returned so she called his mobile.
No answer.
‘And that was the last I saw of him,’ she said to Tobias as they sat, that evening, in a noisy bar. ‘But this feels weird, talking about an ex when…’
‘Don’t be silly.’ Tobias smiled at her.
He had honest eyes. ‘It’s your family at stake. So what now?’
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10 comments
Judging from the responses, it seems all are writers wanting to take a stab at writing the next installment. Eventhough we are now on the 13th installment, most of these responses happen to be for the first, a bit misleading in a way until you read carefully.
I'm confused - the title is "A London Story" but what's being published bears little or no relation to it. Babygirl appears to have been spirited AWAY from London; the frequent flashbacks to Germany are quite simply bizarre; thank god Howard Dorman has paid attention to the title!! This story is utterly depressing.
I think the best way to trace Franz would be to place a sheet of translucent paper over an old photograph of him and then carefully sketch his outline with a soft pencil, adding as much detail and colour for realism as possible.
It's no doubt that the piece is well written and would be a good read, but it's a genre. Toby did what he does -write well and about something he has a story in his head about. But if the TimeOut people wanted a large participation then it would have been better to start us off at a path with many possible paths.
Hmmm, nice idea, shame the first chapter is less than inspirational.
Really fun idea, but agreed the beginning doesnt leave a lot to work with at all. I guess the next chapter will really set the tone in stone. Also a deadline wld be nice for submissions (!)
Sorry to change the subject chaps,but I've just noticed that the capricious gods of the Time Out books section have once again ignored our prayers for the listing of our poetry club which they insist is finished. NO !
Y Tuesday poetry club, Tuesday 6th March 2007, 8pm, 3 Kings pub, Clerkenwell close EC1
London's cosy, candle lit club with a cat, 1 year old and going strong. Still a whopping FREE to get in.
Great idea, but a deadline when entries have to be in by each week would be useful. I couldn't see on in the mag or on the site.
Great Idea!! This would have been great fun, just wonder why you had to start us off so somberly with negativity looming in the future. It leaves us very little versatility. Hope you give us the chance again and start us off with a little lighter feeling and a chance for a diverse plot. I'll be looking forward to it.
Nice start Toby, rich with promise and all sorts of potential. It's inspired me to attempt an entry, but I'm a bit rubbish at fiction. Looking forward to the next episode folks.